Hi LostGhost: Seeking & Learning

I'm glad I read this work of yours. It is my pleasure to both read and comment on your work "Graveyard of Time"  on behalf of "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" .

First Impression/Thoughts:
It took me all the way to the end before I finally figured out what the poem was about, but when I did I thought it was great. I just worry that not all might figure it out.

Creativity/Impact:
The idea of the past as time that is dead and buried is an interesting metaphor. It can be developed further.

Message/Theme:
Honestly I'm not sure what the message is. I get the idea of times passed and life spent being compared to a graveyard, but then so what? Personally I would like the message to be clearer, if I just didn't manage to get it.

Technique/Technical Notes:
These are just my thoughts and observations. I may not have read the work the way you intended. Please decide for yourself if these comments are helpful to you; if not, feel free to disregard them.

Title - The title is the first thing that prospective readers will see. An excellent title, and certainly one that drew me in straight away.

Grammar/Wording - I noticed nothing that jarred or confounded the reading. This is always a sign of good writing.

Form/Flow - Some occasional rhymes, sometimes alternating, sometimes in couplets, but not regular.

Emotion/Imagery - Some vivid imagery conjured, such as the aged woman and the baby.

Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
It's a well-composed and lyrical poem with a central conceit that can make it great if further developed. Thank you for a wonderful read!


Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Azrael

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .