Hi pinkbarbie

I'm glad I read this work of yours. It is my pleasure to both read and comment on your work "Invalid Item"  on behalf of "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" .

First Impression/Thoughts:
The poem gets off to a bright and positive start, that suggests it will be a life-affirming piece. The conclusion rounds off this impression nicely.

Creativity/Impact:
A variety of devices is used to titillate, including juxtaposition of contrasts, listing, and vivid imagery.

Message/Theme:
How you choose to spend limited time is important. The persona shows a positive way.

Technique/Technical Notes:
These are just my thoughts and observations. I may not have read the work the way you intended. Please decide for yourself if these comments are helpful to you; if not, feel free to disregard them.

Title - The title is the first thing that prospective readers will see. The title here is catchy, almost demanding, and delivers the crux of the poem in just three words. Excellent choice.

Grammar/Wording - I noticed almost nothing that jarred or confounded the reading. This is always a sign of good writing.
I choose to spent mine, - Perhaps you meant to say 'spend' instead?

Form/Flow -
A mix of free verse and rhymed stanzas. I personally felt the rhyming parts a little forced, and the free verse more effective and powerful.

Emotion/Imagery -
Lots of great phrases here. My favorite is 'a lantern in my spirit'.

Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:

Thank you for a wonderful read!


Keep writing! Wishing you all the best,

Azrael

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