Hey, Elizabeth , I'm really glad I read this. Here's what I about "Invalid Item"  -

1) The rhyme and meter scheme. Managing to keep up a regular scheme for both while telling a story is no mean feat indeed! This is especially since you chose a rather difficult aaaa bbbb cccc rhyme scheme, but you made it look easy. Wow!

2) Imagery. I love the image you conjure of the persona with a snow halo, armed and ready for the dangers of the new world.

3) The persona. She's not only a lean, mean nightstalker killing machine who's survived for fifteen years in a post-apocalyptic world, she's got heart as well. Adding in that bit about her mother's song is a nice touch that adds a whole other dimension to her character.

There's absolutely nothing I would change about this piece. It's a wonderful read!



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .