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Hi Kyle Curcio Author IconMail Icon, I'm really glad I found this. Here's what I *Heart* about "Invalid Item" Open in new Window. -

1) A young mouse wants to go exploring beyond the hedgerow where it lives. It is counseled against it with warnings of the dangers and difficulties it would face outside. In the end, it does not stray but its dreams still remain.
I'm not sure whether this is a cautionary tale, and if so whether we're supposed to be on the side of the mouse who chooses pragmatism over adventure, or against it. But therein lies the beauty of this poem that allows you to read what you wish, while portraying clearly the story of the mouse. Very well done!*CheckB*

2) The consistent rhyme scheme and meter. There are some uses of half-rhyme, but the smooth meter sweeps up and carries the reader along at a brisk trot so well it is hardly noticeable.
Still would it not be possible to find perfect rhymes for these examples? 'see' with 'possibilities', 'seem' with 'deemed' *CheckB*


Other than the parts that don't completely rhyme, there's nothing else I would change about this work. It's a wonderful piece of children's poetry!

Thanks for a great read!

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