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Hi Lovina Author IconMail Icon, I'm really glad I found this. Here's what I *Heart* about "Invalid Item" Open in new Window. -

1) The neat stanza structure. Each rhyming couplet explores and describes a different aspect of the significance of green. I think you did an amazing job in covering each area in only two lines!*CheckB*

2) The uplifting tone. There is a sense of understated wonder and respect for the color, which is punctuated by that single use of the word 'Green' right in the middle of the poem.*CheckB*


Here's what would get this a higher rating from me:
I'm no poet laureate nor an expert, so this is just my personal response and opinion. There are several instances of imperfect rhyme, and the meter is quite irregular as well. Since you have chosen rhyming couplets which impart a sense of regularity, groundedness and balance, having perfect rhymes and matching meters would complement that choice much better, but that's just my view!


Thanks for a great read!

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