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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hello there, Someone!
I'm not an expert on poetry (or romance), but this is good from what I can tell.
I like how you structured this, but it was the words (of course!) that are that makes this what it is. I'm sure a lot of people have been down this road of infidelity, and you did a good job of showing just how 'the other woman' can be just as hurt as the other two 'victims' in this scenario. And writing in that structure where you have the times when you're together as opposed to having the times when you're not offset like that just makes it more poignant, if that makes any sense.
Like I said, I'm no expert, but it did seem the rhyming scheme (syllable-wise) was a little off, but it's still the words that make this stand out.
Very well done, Someone!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing this, and once again, welcome to WdC!

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