** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

Hi, 🌝 HuntersMoon!

I am the Wordy Jay , and this (hopefully) awesome review is brought to you by "The Mad Dash Contest" . I'm also reviewing your work as part of the "Invalid Item" .


Haha! I love your witty little poem! Your struggles triumphs over the 7 Deadly Sins made a most interesting read -- kudos to the wife!

Now, before we take the plunge, allow me to read you your rights...


The following review is just my 2 cents' worth!

Feel free to do whatever you wish with my opinions/suggestions --
whether it is to adopt them, discard them, or anything in between!

Ready? Here goes!

At First Glance

First Impression

This is a humorous account of a man's resolutions for the new year. I particularly liked the seamless introduction of all the 7 deadly sins in the story.


Emotional Reaction

You made me laugh at the end!


What Worked?

Your comedic style of narration, and your ability to produce effective punchlines are what made this poem so funny.
Great job!

Reader Appeal

Title & Tagline

The Seven Deadly … Resolutions?
The deadly sins mostly have died ...

Both your title and tagline made great hooks and did a great job of piquing my curiosity.


Ending

Your last stanza was superb; and sealed the deal for what was already a very witty poem! Nice!

The Poem

Story/Message

You tackled the prompt beautifully; making the most of the line count. Each deadly sin was equally expounded on, and there was a clear structure to your story. Well done!


Rhythm & Rhyme

The rhyming is consistent throughout (AABB pattern).

However, I'm afraid that I found the rhythm in Stanza 7 to be a bit "off". Perhaps you might want to makes some changes here?


Tone/Flow

Other than the "glitch" in Stanza 7, the poem flowed well, and the cheeky tone made the piece an amusing read.

Language

Style

You have a knack of making your characters very personable -- which does a lot to endear them to your readers.

And of course, wit and humour never goes out of style!


Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation

Line 3, Stanza 3

'til Publisher’s knocks at my door.

Perhaps you mean:

'til Publishers knock at my door.


Other than that, I found no glaring mistakes.

Conclusion

Summary

Comedy is hard work but you seem to have a real flair for it! With the exception of Stanza 7 (which might need some work), this is a lovely poem, and I truly enjoyed reading it. Good job!


In a Nutshell

A fun and entertaining poem about one man's relationship with the 7 Deadly Sins!



Well, I do hope you found my comments and suggestions helpful. Please know that this detailed critique was done in the spirit of support and encouragement.


All the best in your writing adventures!

Jay