This is a review from "Simply Positive Review Forum " 

Remember I am not a professional reviewer. These are just my personal impressions and thoughts. My goal is to be encouraging and give you something that will actually help your writing.

First Impressions:

Sounds like the potential beginning of a romance novel or story. Liked the use of dialogue. For the sake of the contest I would bold the three words you were supposed to use in your story.

My Favorite Elements:

I liked the interaction between the characters.

Suggestions:

Rather abrupt change of scene in the middle of this. All of a sudden they were in the elevator. You might want to find a way to lead into that.

Overall:

I liked this. Good dialogue can be very effective and your was believable and logical. It is exactly the way two friends would talk to each other. Good luck with the contest and hope my words here were helpful.

Keep on writing!

Pico

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