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 Circus City  Open in new Window. [GC]
These are normal clowns. They have a thirst for blood and a hunger for little kids.
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Rated: GC | (3.0)
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Buenos dias, Jake!
For one of your 1st stories on here, this isn't bad, but I'm not sure how the title interacts with this story, unless there's going to be more to come. Is the beginning of something longer? Where are these clowns? I read, write, and love horror, so I want to see these 'blood thirsty clowns', darnit! You've started out with a good beginning, but then it just hit a brick wall.
Great spelling and telling, though, but I did see a couple of tiny niggles:
'She has a(n) awesome body with (an) ever so popular hour glass figure.'
Kee ponw ritin gon, Jake, and keep me posted if there's more to come on this. Oh, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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