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 |  | The Piper  [E] What defines reality? Carolyn is a brilliant psychiatrist, can she save Benjamin?  |
| (4.5)  Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! Greetings, Ken! This is the 2nd story I’ve reviewed today about an insane asylum, and I thought it was pretty good. Your descriptions of Benjamin’s condition and symptoms were well done, and the entire piece had a good flow. I also like how you had Carol bring him ‘to the light’, and the dialogue was excellent. I’ve reviewed a lot of pieces where a writer uses speech tag after speech tag between a two-person dialogue, and it drives me (and probably a lot of other readers) crazy! ‘he said’, ‘she said’, ‘he said’...Aarrghh! But that ending was what made this story shine. One (or two) sentences to finish a story like this was perfect, and it gives the story a nice twist. Kee ponw ritin gon, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you’re going to love it here. Nice job, Ken. I don’t have any suggestions. Kee ponw ritin gon, and welcome to WdC (again)!
PS-Not sure if I told you this in my last review, but if you want more exposure for your items you can put them on the Please Review Page or The Plug Page under Community on the left hand side.
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