Hello Acme !

This is your local and frolic like Sb here. I'm reviewing you on behalf of the Simply Positive group and stumbled across your piece thanks to our involvement in the SPAM Hunters Horrible Poetry Contest. Let's get rolling!

How SPAM-irifc is this?

First impressions- This is your first attempt at free form poetry and a challenge you felt should be answered by me and WakeUpAndLive~gummy worms BOO . She and I are free form junkies fans, you could say. And... it is way better than my free form I started writing back in the day and that wasn't even intentionally bad. So, to say the least, you nailed this form and this is so good it undermines the badness of this SPAM-tastic poem.Let me show you one of these really well-done, very pretty lines you have going on here:

Devil in silk--shows every sin,
in every twisting,
gentle shining fold, half glimpsed by gaslight.

Like, that right there? That is some well made poetic free verses you have here. There's the devil in silk, twisting, half-glimpsed by gas-light. Pretty stuff! Then, we go into the SPAM-y bits of it.

This poem is so much fun, and actually all of your poetry I've read for this event is fun, well-done, and it's been a hoot to come across.

Favorite Things Which I Enjoyed Oh Boy'ed
make me fit ...
smiling necks agape with giggles.


Well, for the SPAM-y bits that made me lose my bits I'd say these two lines above are two of my favorites, though this line: Pink bits of gristle hard, unyielding like a bomb
Melting jelly, moistening greased lips. Goes right up there too for awesomely bad stuff!

Overall Comments
Overall, for your first attempt at free form poetry this is really well done. It puts to shame my first attempts at it and this poem is meant for the SPAMness of writing intentionally bad poetry. I will give you a one star because that's what we are totally after. But, let it be known I did want to bump it up another star or two. I hope this little review of mine is helpful. Thank you for sharing and keep on writing! =D

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