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| Ahoy, Batman! This isn’t in the style of your usual stories, but it was still pretty good. Using some those phrases and the way it was written gives it sort of a medieval, old English flavor, but I don’t think they had backpacks back in those days.  This concept of a hiker taking refuge in a cabin with ‘nuns’ is rather unique, and I like the mystery you give to the ‘sisters’. Personally, I probably would have left as soon as I finished my meal, but unfortunately you decided to take advantage of their hospitality and stay the night. Not a good move, as I’m sure you found out in the end. For some reason, this felt kind of like a mix between Cinderella and Goldilocks And The 3 Bears; Cinderella with her evil stepsisters, and Goldilocks finding the bear’s cabin in the woods. And now that I think about it, I don’t even remember what ever happened to Goldilocks! Did the bears eat her too? Anyway, nice job, and congrats on the "SCREAMS!!!"  victory!One tiny niggle (twice, I think): ‘I called out a few times, but the five woman, each in a nun's habit, ignored me.’ (women) ‘The woman had each gone up the stairs and I burped as I laid down upon the bench.’ As always, kee ponw ritin gon, and have a most terrifying day!
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