Hello Whispering Ghost of C.St.Ann !


I'm your local Sb here reviewing for the Simply Positive group. I'm also reviewing as part of this Piratey event: "Invalid Item" . Let's get rolling!

Corrections/Suggestions
First impressions- We have this story focusing on the exchange between Death and this main character. I like how there is some humor and fun between these two characters. I'm wondering why the note was there and what she was up to before death arrived but I'm guessing... nothing good if she's been having such a hard time lately.

This seems like Death visited her for more of a reality check than anything? It seems like he's visited before and she doesn't seem to out of place or thrown off by his presence. I was a little surprised she wasn't thrown off by his presence and just kind of commented on the hood and that he was early to the party.

Characters in Your Story

Death- He's oddly kind and doesn't seem like he wants to take her soul. This almost seems like a spirit intervention for her. He seems like quite a nice guy, entity and that he tries to talk up her confidence.

Margaret- This lady seems nice, sweet, but definitely like the world hasn't been too kind to her lately. She's been struggling and so it's nice that Death tries to talk some common sense in her.

Things Which I Enjoyed
I enjoyed the dialogue between these two and how you tackled the back and forth between them. It's a sweet story and concludes without our character being taken away by death it seems. They have an easy going, laid back relationship of sorts. He calls her pathetic, she shoots back at him that at least she has a face still. They almost seem like an old couple bickering about things.

Overall Comments
Overall this is a fun little story and exchange between these two characters. They are both quite likable and you deal with the dialogue only restriction incredibly well with this. The only thing was I was surprised she wasn't more thrown off by his presence and it seems like he's visited more than once possibly? And it was a little odd that this guy would fax over information instead of texting but that's mentioned earlier in this story. I hope this little review is helpful for you. Thank you for sharing and keep on writing! =D

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