Greetings, Uncommonspirit!

My name is Lady Cubbyella and I am one of the sly foxes from the House of Florent.

Title: Angeleyes

First Impression: Oh my goodness! I love how you had me thinking the narrator of this story was a woman, but... (I won't give it away in case someone else would like to read this and find out. ) What a surprise and I love it when that happens!

What needs your attention: The only things that stood out--and very little, indeed--were a few areas where perhaps you could use a bit stronger verbs. For example: He took my heart could instead read... He stole my heart

What part I liked best: They will hail me as a rogue, I love this!

Overall impression: You've really captured my interest! And I'm curious to know what's going to happen next. I'm not an avid science fiction reader, but once in a while something comes along that pulls me in, such as this. When I was a kid, I absolutely loved watching Lost in Space episodes. I know a lot of people think the show was corny, but as a kid, I loved it! My cousins and I even played it... and I was always Penny.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.

Have a great day and...
  K e e p on W r i t i n g !

Cubby ")

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