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July 22, 2016. Hello, Aipper! I found your story on the Read a Newbie link. I will give you my honest opinion and hope you find this feedback useful.

*Quill* Overall Impression: An interesting story of discovering something strange while looking for your lost dog.

*Quill* Plot: A woman faints at the sight of a man coming out of an unfamiliar round building.

*Quill* Style and Voice: Third-person, limited.

*Quill* Scene/Setting: A workman rushes to the aid of a woman that fainted in the driveway to his building.

*Quill* Characters: Rucker, unidentified woman, unidentified man dressed in a lab coat.

*Quill* Dialogue: Good exchange of information between Rucker and the woman who is dazed and confused.

*Quill* Grammar and Mechanics: There are some errors of misused or misplaced commas, word tense and or word choices.

*Quill* Suggestions: change backwards to backward; help to helps; three story to three-story. If you read the story aloud, the punctuation and word choice mishaps will jump out at you.


Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

GaelicQueen
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