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 Review #4241649 |
 | The Wanderer  [E] A mysterious figure in the dead of night. My only true creepy experience.  |
| (4.0)| 7/21/16. Hello Stevelegend! I found your story on Request a Review. I will give you my honest opinion and hope you find this feedback useful.  Overall Impression: A good paranormal story. Plot: Travelers stay overnight at a friend's farmhouse when a storm rages during the night. Style and Voice: Written in first-person, narrative style. Scene/Setting: After a long drive, mother and son sleep in the living room. Son awakens to the feeling that someone or something is watching them. Characters: Mother, son, friend's family. Dialogue: None. Grammar and Mechanics: Basically looks good. There are a couple of words spelled differently than I would use (British v. American spellings). Check verb tenses and comma placements. You have some opening clauses that need commas. Suggestions: Late into the night, I woke up feeling very uneasy, as if I was being watched.By this stage, I was freaked and unsure what to do. The story kept my attention from beginning to end. With a little polishing, it will be a better story. Thank you for sharing your story. Write On! GaelicQueen  ** Image ID #1940845 Unavailable **
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