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Having a kid sister around.
by Chigger Button Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Greetings, Chigger!
This isn't bad for your first story on here, and although you say you're not a writer, I don't see anything really wrong with this. I like how you didn't immediately let the reader know how or what you were aiming at the 'intruders' until a little further into the story. That is actually a sign of an experienced writer; it keeps the reader's attention to the story as they will keep reading to find out!
I'm an only child, so I didn't have any little sisters or brothers whose head I could knock. But I'm sure I would have if I did! *BigSmile*
Great spelling and telling, and I hope you and even 'The Witch' are doing good these days!
Kee ponw ritin gon, and welcome to WdC! You're going to love it around here!

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