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 |  | 'A Writer's Curse '  [13+] Reading can be a deadly pleasure...  |
| (4.0)  This is a review from "WdC Kind Hearts" Hi Angus ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item. Wow, really creepy! When I reviewed your item yesterday, I had been meaning to read this one as well but I couldn't find the time to. When I opened WDC, I thought of giving yours a complete read and see what the story was about. The title of your story is very intriguing, it is even more interesting than the last one. The reader wonders what kind of curse the writer is referring to in the story. The beginning of your story was excellent. I loved how you used the idea to write a chapter from a novel she is reading and then adding your story in too. It was like a story within a story. The starting of your story wasn't too horror, in fact it seemed normal and I liked how Donna complained about her money badly spent on a book that isn't even worth it. I could actually relate to Donna at that point, you know reading about the same stereotypical, cliche stories and nothing different in them. The flow of your story was very good. You change the mood of the story was normal to a creepy one when you introduced the scene of Patty's death. Even that wasn't too scary but the phone call! It sent chills down my spine! Only after reading your story does the reader understand the meaning behind the title of your story. Well done! After reading your story, I have made up my mind! I will always buy a book after reading the biography of the author and the last page!   It made me feel creep-ed out and I didn't want to attend any phone calls from any unknown caller! I had only two suggestions for your work. ==> They were both widowed sixty-somethings They were both widowed, sixty-something. ==>The chimes of her cell phone brought her awake The chimes of her cell phone woke her from her slumber/ The chimes of her cell phone brought her back. The 'brought her' sounds a bit too awkward. Thank you for sharing your work with us! Write On! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 05/14/2016 @ 3:39pm EDT