"WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" 




Please remember that you are the best judge of what is right for your story! Whatever I say, whether positive or negative, is just my opinion!

Hi Winnie, My name is River and I'd like to welcome you to WDC I'm reviewing The Candle Seller . I found this story on the Read a Newbie Page.

Hooks: I like the title very much, it's a good hook.
Your story description is okay, but always remember that these two hooks are what your readers see first, so the need to be strong and interesting. They both need to draw your reader.

Overall Impression: I like what you have, so far.

You are especially good at character description. Clancy's thoughts and actions as well as his physical description make him stand out. Little habits or tics, etc. help to bring a character to life. (drumming his thumbs in an odd rhythm) I have a vivid image of Clancy in my mind. Excellent job!

Your story has a nice flow, and it leaves your readers longing for more.

I saw no spelling or grammar mistakes. I give this one a 5.0 rating.


My Favorite Part: Clancy was a different man, a much graver one, without his glasses. He had barely walked the earth for half a lifetime, yet his eyes were so dull, filled with so much melancholy, it was as if he had seen centuries of misfortune and tragedy.

Suggestions It’s important to have your story noticed by other members of WdC because you need the feedback and reviews to help you be the best writer you can be. To do this you need to post it under different genres, never use “other” if you can possibly use something else.


Final Thoughts: You're off to a good start, I'm anxious to read more of this story!


Write On


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