Hi Fyndorian,
This is a wonderful poem. The tone is frenzied. It grips the reader and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone gripped by powerful emotions. The reader is completely engulfed in the strong emotions in the poem. They will read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a fabulous rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.