An interesting, tragic poem. I remember writing similar poems at that age. I think we all struggle with ourselves and writing is a great way to release some of that energy. I really like the repetition and the three lines "A scream, / a cry, / a tear." really stand out and add to the emotional sense of this piece. I can see the narrator screaming and crying on the floor which lends itself to the tragic nature of the poem. Something I would like to see is maybe examples of how the narrator is a monster. What happened to create this self image? Why does the narrator feel this way? I think adding a past might really provide an extra sense of imagery to this poem. I like how you start with the concept of friendship and end on the same note. It adds a nice theme to the poem and is makes the ending more powerful and finite. Overall, I liked this poem (although it is sad and brings back sad memories). I think you really captured some intense emotions and wrote about them well. Thanks for sharing such an emotional piece from your pre-teens.

Thanks again! And write on!

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