A very interesting poem--a sonnet, I believe? (Okay, just checked the last comments and yes, it's a sonnet) I think you did a very interesting thing with a restricted form. I love that you compared music and art as well... art. I think you really captured something beautiful. I like that you played a bit with punctuation;I always like to see that in a poem I feel it makes it more interesting to read and helps with the pace. One thing that threw me off was that the first two stanzas are about the girl and the third one is about the boy. I guess in that set up it makes me think it's going to be all about the girl and the boy is thrown in there. I guess a suggestion would be to maybe start the first stanza about something general then move into the girl and then the boy so that they get an even amount of stage time. Otherwise the focus is more on the girl. I like the repetition of the line "smiling happily, all aglow" I think you picked a good word choice to repeat because it shows the inner glow of artists. I also think you have some really good imagery in this poem. The way you describe artwork and the music is really nice and brings to mind vibrant images rather than just telling the reader what is going on. Overall, I really enjoyed this poem and the meanings it presented. Keep up the good work!


Thanks again! And write on!

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