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 Turkey Day Open in new Window. [E]
Thinking kind, loving thoughts with Thanksgiving approaching - a rhyming poem.
by Tim Chiu Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Good day to you Tim Chiu Author Icon. My name is Shelley and this review is for your poem "Turkey Day" Open in new Window.. This is a micro-review for the group "The WDC Angel Army" Open in new Window.. Please note that this review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find it helpful.

**Impressions**


Title:
"Turkey Day" is a good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem. It sets the stage for it in its reflection of the theme's intent while at the same time captures your poem's essence as it acts as a portal to invite readers into it. Nicely done.

General/Form/Style:
For me, poetry opens the door of opportunity for the writer to explore different ways of presenting poetry and to do it in new and unique ways to stimulate readers even if we sometimes bend the rules of forms to make it our own. I'm a formalist poet and I love to read, write and create form poetry. I like most styles of poetry, and rhyme (in particular) is a favorite with me. A good write and message about what thanksgiving means to you that is heartfelt. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:
Imagery and descriptives are nicely done. Nice use of this poetic device. Nice use of color and shading in your words to promote and evoke feeling through sight, scent and sound. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a warm picture of love, family and fellowship on this special holiday of giving thanks for hearth and home that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye.

Flow/Rhythm:
Flow is good. line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

Rhyme:
Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd eeff gghh. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:
Lovely depth of feeling. You express affection for family and friends on this special day of thankfulness, togetherness and celebration of this holiday, away from the distractions, troubles and dangers that still affects others in the world where joy and hope seems to go unseen.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:
Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about the blessings shared on this holiday. Nice use of alliteration with good assonance and consonance. No spelling errors found. Punctuation: just a suggestion to change the semi-colon to a comma at the end of line one; remove the comma at the end of line three and remove the period at the end of line six. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. I especially like the following lines:
"A hearty meal, and folks' applause,
With gratefulness, its major cause." - these two lines carry the spirit of the reason for giving thanks for blessings received that is expressed throughout your poem and which any reader can relate to.

**Overall**

This is a lovely message that begins our holiday season, one of gratitude and well wishes to those we care for. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

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