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I'm reviewing your piece today.

My initial thoughts: The transition from childhood to adulthood is indeed a subtle thing. You wrote about it eloquently in your paper.

My favorite part: The last phrase: "The child inside us is what keeps the magic alive and makes life all the more interesting!" Truer words have never been spoken. "Acting our age" should be an option (especially at my age...LOL

Some suggestions are: There are some typos that I noticed. Capitalization and some punctuation issues. They aren't bad, but it would help with the flow of the story. I'm not an expert, but I would be happy to help you with them with you via email, if you'd like.

Overall: I like what you've written. We can indeed be "child-like" without having to be "child-ish." You've made a wonderful start with your writing. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

Thank you for sharing your work, and Keep on Writing!

sincerely,
amy

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