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 Winter Snowflakes Open in new Window. [E]
Can you see them fall? Because we've never seen a snowflake.
by Candied Apples Author Icon
Review of Winter Snowflakes  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Candied Apples Author IconMail Icon*Smile*

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I'm Samberine Everose Author IconMail Iconyour little fairy friend here in WDC. *FairyL*
and I'm here to give you a review as my *Giftr* to you for being here*ButterflyR*

By the way CONGRATULATIONS! for being a registered Author in this wonderful World of Writing Dot Com. *Smile*I hope you will enjoy sharing your writings and finding your way up here.

I'm not expert in reviewing, these are just only my humble opinion and thoughts, who just like to read bits and pieces of everyone. Please try to chew and just ignore, if doesn't fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Reading* THE TITLE-
My tiny wings brought me into the Newbie Review Corner to find something to review, and while I'm flapping my little wings, this piece of yours did catch my attention.
The combination of the two word Winter and Snowflakes create a good imagery, while looking at the given title, these two pertain to cold season but combining them gives a delightful feeling, because winter and snowflakes is the sign before Christmas, the most wonderful time of the year.
And Christmas reate hope to every one else.

Good job, because the title hooked me as your reader. *Thumbsup*

*Star* A title in poetry should be captivating to attract or enticed a reader, because a title served as the main door before entering to the main body of a piece, this is where the first impression and expectation was created for a prospective reader.

THE BODY-
As I begin to flap my little wings into the body of the piece and mused the created lines.
The first that I like is the created good imagery between the lines,
you did so finely in scribbling the lines by using an opening mood of hoping.
Correct rhythm of the poetry and its in free verse.
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*Cut* COMMENTS AND SUGGESTION:

I didn't find words that can distract the flow of the poem.
I just have doubt on the used of punctuation marks.
Like:
Go outside and play,
Grab your mittens,
Grab your boots,
Don't use a capital letter after using a comma, because it continue the given thought.

*Pencil* Over all, you did well on this piece, just only some tweak on the punctuation marks. *Smile*

Thank you for sharing this piece, and the enjoyment in reading it.
I am looking forward to read more of your works again.

Until next reviewing, just keep smiling while stay in writing and reviewing.*Smile*

Regards,

Samberine Sig.
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