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I'm reviewing your piece today.

My initial thoughts: You've written about the life of a beggar in the Victorian era. The scenery reflected in your words paint a vivid image of this. I can see the scene clearly in my mind as I read it. It is almost as though the beggar is invisible and the only thing seen is the cup. Most people would hurry away from such a sight, as it is not their nature to stop to help.

My favorite part: I like how you repeat the first two lines as the last two lines. It shows a clear distinction between the beggar and those who he would ask help from.

Some suggestions are: I really saw no grammatical issues with your writing and I saw no typos either. The poem was well thought out and written.

Overall: I am glad that you found an outlet for your writing here at Writing.com. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

Thank you for sharing your work, and Keep on Writing!

sincerely,
amy

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