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entry for Poison Apple Theater
by amyjo-Keeping it real and fun! Author Icon
Review by Angus Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Bonjour, Amyjo!
This is a really cool, ominous piece, and I love the voice you used. That, along with the wording, is what makes this piece stand out.
What's strange though is that I know how 'you' feel, and everything you've said here is so true. People (some anyway) do only remember loved ones on their 'deathdays', and that line about them choking up 'with guilt and a relief when they can leave once again' is spot on, unfortunately. 'Tis no wonder 'you' envy the dead!
I also enjoyed that line, 'In such a hurry to live, that they forget to have a life.'
Gee, Angus. Who does that remind you of?
My only suggestion (unless you had a word count of course) would be to expand on this a little. But then again, that also might ruin it.
Thanks for sharing this, Amyjo! I don't know if the contest has been judged yet, but I think you've got a pretty good shot at winning!
Kee ponw ritin gon, and have creeptacular evening/night/morning/day!

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