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| (5.0)| Hi, Grim. Nixie, here.  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"  Overall Impression What a peculiar beginning. By the third sentence, I was trapped, driven by curiosity. A few thoughts Your story was creepy and excellent. The more I read, the more I wanted to stop. But the writing was simply too skilled. The mother's violence sickened me, maybe more than her skewed, screwed up perception of the world. We all know true stories of parents who treat their kids horribly. Susan Smith's comes to mind. She strapped her kids into their car seats and rolled the car into a lake because her new boyfriend didn't like them. Fiction mirrors reality, and both bring the same emotions of shock and revulsion. There were several ways to reveal the difference between the two sisters, but you chose a natural way, a childish discovery that rang true for these kids. Biting off the hair was an extremely disturbing image. So seemingly harmless, yet it whacked me with levity. Since there's no father mentioned, I can only guess he ran away from his insane wife, she killed him, or she kicked him out. Unless there's another shed where she imprisons him. Lasting Impression Awesome technique, telling this story without using quotation marks. In this instance, the punctuation would have distracted from the rhythm of the words. Writing that the words themselves were spellbinding sounds ridiculous, but that's how I experienced this story. Awesomely disturbing write.   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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