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| (5.0)| Hi, Dollar Days. Nixie, here. Overall Impression This was horrible. I mean wonderful, but the ending was horrible. In a good way that struck deeply into my heart. Awesome use of the prompts! A few thoughts You really made me care for this little guy. I imagined him on that skateboard, and the skinned knee brought back memories of my son. As the plot progressed, it expanded. At first it was only mildly disturbing, as the events were slowly played out. Then more details came in and I ended up taking this huge breath at the end and saying "Oh, that's horrible." But not referring to the story. Lasting Impression Hope springs eternal, right? Jesse was a smart character, and if anyone can pull out of the brain surgery with a greater chance of success, it's Jesse. The kid was exceptional right from the start, and since the story didn't end conclusively, I can live my dream. For any story, this was an awesome character that captured me. To be able to do this for a cramp entry? I was very impressed. No wonder you won first place. You built an entire society with these few words. Parents who were willing to sacrifice their children so they could have a better life? Children enslaved to computers linked directly into their brain? You could write a novel based on this work. Great write!   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 10/06/2015 @ 11:49am EDT