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Overall Impression
With just a few words, you put me on that road. I realize this is a somewhat tragic piece, but Pennsylvania can be a balm to the soul. I feel it every time I cross that border.

A few thoughts
When someone writes so concisely, it can be difficult to find words to describe the experience of reading. Writers, like you, capture life and feelings exquisitely.

The title Wildfires was repeated in the fourth line, and I thought it would carry the most impact, the word that would define the poem. But I imagined what the drive looked like, I've been there, but not as a professional over the road truck driver. Is that what's implied here?

Lasting Impression
What wrecked me were the last three lines. The last line holds a threat, a recklessness that sparked fear. The daring sentence also quietly screamed independence and endurance.

The line breaks themselves lent a broken rhythm that suited this piece and the punctuation guided the reader.

Nice work. Don't let that old stone come to any harm.





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