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Don Wiskerleone 443Words Contest Entry Open in new Window. [18+]
A feline mob boss tries to smooth cultural differences between his owl and dog allies.
by Plague Author Icon
Review by Nixie 🦊 Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Overall Impression
Despite your handle, all I see you spreading is great writing. You excelled at working the prompt and the characters you created had me laughing. From your words, I formed the setting in my mind.

A few thoughts
Having a cat sit as the Don is probably the opposite of what others might construe. The owl, known for wisdom, would fit the part of arbitrator, and dogs customarily run the show. This subtle flip of the expected brought this plot to life.

The description of the owl in the first paragraph? A talon-tattooed owl? Original and clever.

Casting Ivan as a street Borzoi gave him the instant reputation of a scraper, in human terms, a threatening presence. Since I'd never heard of this breed, I looked up the definition and saw the various pictures. Due to word limitations, you had only a few to capture the essence of this dog. You worked in the Russian ancestry, so great job there!

The cat, with the cream tail, the least played character was my favorite, but then I'm partial to cats.

Lasting Impression
The pharse 'biscuits is biscuits' probably won't leave my mind for a while. Ivan's last act was hilarious and ooh-so-fitting for his character.

The dialogue/interaction between the three animals was crisp, witty, and sharp. I don't think you needed more words to make this story complete and with such a satisfying conclusion. Great work!





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