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 |  | Grandad Was Dead (But He Didn't Mind)  [13+] A very odd household.  |
| (4.5)| Hi there. Nixie, here. Overall Impression I can't seem to stop laughing. Because it's your anniversary, I tried to find a story without a ribbon, but the title nabbed me, and I fell into the narrative. Good grief, this narrator was hilarious. I liked the moments of utter confusion that quickly led to okay, I'll go along with that because it was told so reliably. The dusting, the spraying, the lost limbs, all of it was wonderful. A few thoughts The feeling of country and good old boys came through naturally, without trying to force dialect down the reader's throat. The mom played a great side character, the so-called sane person in the cast. But she ended up looking like a fussy person who nearly ruined her son's ability to function in life. Take down a person consistently, and never offer a compliment? The recipe for creating a personality disaster. Granddad, both dead and alive saved those boys.  The second paragraph was a bit confusing about what house they were in. Numbers less than twenty should be spelled out. Some of the sentences in parentheses went on a bit too long, fostering more confusion when clarity was needed, due to the wonderful absurdity of this story. Lasting Impression When the narrator started dating? Great move to bring the plot forward. When he finally finds his girl, she one-ups him? I almost wish that hadn't been the conclusion. Granddad by himself was the best. And I wanted it to stay that way. Great write, all the way around.   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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