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 On the Farm Open in new Window. [E]
When childhood was fun.
by >>^..^<< Kat Author Icon
Review of On the Farm  Open in new Window.
Review by Nixie 🦊 Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi, Kat. Nixie, here.

Overall Impression
Cute story written in 2007, edited in 2008. Looking back, how do you feel about your writing now? I know mine has improved since joining!

Thoughts
A farm setting settles in the reader's mind as a safe place, where simple fun and hard work was Life on the Farm. That's what we all want, right?

A few things struck me here. The childhood adventures were non-stop. The barrel rolling inside the barrel? Insanity. The moment where the narrator stands up to Harry was precious. And then the flip side, she experienced the zing of control. That made me laugh.

For a while, one of my daughters owned a cow ranch. She actually tamed the bull so she could walk right up to it and touch his nose. Crazy, right?

Well, if you want me to believe this girl never stepped on a cow pie, then my 'befriend the bull' story is true, as well.

In closing
As a kid, I learned never to tell my mom I was bored. One day, she had me out there trying to salt a bird's tail. In this story, with a gang of friends and the awesome place to play, I'm sure those words were never spoken.

Nice job bringing the story 'round to the beginning by observing the rocks. I think the story would be more enjoyable if it was lifted out of the telling and into the showing. You've probably heard that a time or two, though. Happy Anniversary!

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