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 Review #4161991 |
 | complex art of staying alive  [E] a brief trial run at motivational writing  |
| (2.5)| Hi, Q. Nixie, here. Welcome to WDC from  "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! Overall Impression Hmm. Readers will appreciate your effort to reach out and share what you've learned along your path. A few thoughts However, if you want appreciation from your readers, the work needs some editing. Your thoughts are unclear because everything is lumped together, almost like a stream of consciousness. Why not try some paragraphing? Your friend's statement sounds profound, but it's very difficult to discern the exact meaning. I would give those thoughts a separate paragraph. Correct punctuation will clear up more confusion. What works for me is to live with no expectations, as applied to a general principle, not each and every moment. It only takes practice. I'm only human, so sometimes I need an affirmation statement to boost me up. If a certain situation is stressing me, I take a step back and consider how little it means in the wide arc of living. All 'I's' need to be capitalized. Lasting Impression One way to work through our thoughts and feelings is the act of writing. Every one is be to respected. If you really want readers to hear your message, you might consider cleaning this up a bit. But don't give up! Keep writing and reviewing. You'll see examples that will help you grow in your skills.   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 10/01/2015 @ 11:13pm EDT