Review number # 4 of week July 2-8th

Hi Inkwell

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: The Sirens

First Impression: Beautiful yet deceptive made curious about the sirens and the story the author was going to share.

What I liked: The second stanza made me chuckle they are probably the only thing that does not want our money. My mind's eye visualized honey oozing with your word choice, their voices must be beautiful.

What needs your attention: Curious as to why you have seven of eight stanzas with four lines. The one with only three seems oddly out of place. The rhyme does work and the overall flow of the poem is smooth.

Favorite Parts: Beauty and grace creates one lovely image and then quickly disappears with their ambition to make you drown. Then the next stanza shows the beauty is an illusion they are actually hags, withered old monsters with claws and scars leaving the reader thinking I'll heed the warning when I hear the sirens song.

Overall Impression: The author created good imagery and flow in his folkfore poetic warning.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .