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 Child of the Sea Open in new Window. [E]
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello there, Newbie! Welcome to WDC*Starv*
This is a Simply Positive Review.

*Wave2* I loved the ebb and flow of the waves in my mind's eye. The concept of being a child of the sea registers deeply with me -- a Pisces, who grew up not too far from the sea.

*Wave1* The ocean being a sort of mistress-like being with aroma, breath and wind -- so beautiful!*Beach*

Observation:

*Noteb* I could only suggest more use of punctuation or line-breaks to give pause and allow the reader to feel the flow of the waves. It will have more visual impact, rather than the long, wordy lines and will read a bit smoother.

Otherwise, well done! *Ribbonv*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch
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