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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Delete this part of that paragraph; the idea is repeated correctly after this section " I don’t understand what follows here; If he took the baby back into the ghostly building. "

A well written story in which the writer describes a dream she once had; there is much mystery in the dream but the Writer did not choose to analyze her dream and the meaning of the images. One part of the dream was especially nice for her; she met her grandmother there; that's always a nice dream when you have a visit from somebody you loved*Smile*

Mina, you have done quite well with your verb tenses; I am proud of you and your writing. I am proud of you for being willing to write in English as a Second Language; that tells me you are a strong person, sure of yourself, and a willing learner. That's all wonderful about you.

Thanks for the opportunity to read your short story.
'ann
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