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Hi, I am PandaPaws and I am reviewing your poem as part of MuseMasters, please use what you can and throw the rest to the wind. This review represents just my humble opinion

TITLE:
I must admit, I was a bit confused by the title, at first I thought there were three components; Juniper, your muse, and yourself. Perhaps a semi-color or emdash between Juniper and my would work better

THEME:
Your theme of pleaing with your muse made me smile. I have been found pleading with mine as well, especially while I am at work and she is trying to get me to write poetry.

RHYTHM/METER:
Your rhythm and meter could use a bit of work, as you allude to in the first line of the last stanza. Your stanzas break down to the following syllable counts- 10/8/8/9 9/11/14/14 11/13/10/11. When I read the poem aloud, which I recommend any poet do with their work, I stumbled over the second stanza, in particular the second line. It seems rather cumbersome. Perhaps, pondering your thoughts and then trying to find other words to fill the line would help. I have a syllable counting app, a rhyming app, and a dictionary on my phone just for this reason. Trying to find the correct word to fit in a line can be our largest challenge.

RHYME:
Your rhymes are spot on, and your language is superb. I loved your use of sublime/rhyme and counting/mounting. Great use of the English Language!

FORM:
Breaking your poem into quatrains worked very well for your piece, each being a separate thought. Each quatrain has perfect rhyming couplets.

FIGURATIVE LANGUAGE:
I love your furrowed brow as you sit in deep thought. I could picture you pondering your poem and Juniper flitting about, smelling the flowers and totally trying to distract you. Keep pleading with her, you will prevail!

SPELLING/GRAMMAR:
I noted no errors in spelling or grammar. I will give you the same suggestion I was given when I took my first class on writing poetry; it is an old convention to have every line of poetry capitalized. The current convention is to just follow regular grammar rules. This is of course completely up to you.

AREAS FOR IMPROVEMENT:
see the section above on rhythm and meter.

EXCELLENT WRITING EXAMPLES:
The imagery you used in the following lines is outstanding!


Deep in thought, I sit with furrowed brow
Mind wanders, my sentimental thoughts allow
Straying into the unfamiliar terrain of rhyming
Engaging, whimsical, I know, it’s all about timing.

Great job on your first campfire poem, looking forward to reading more of your work!


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