Wow, where to start -- this was quite an impressive read as far as erotica goes, because the story line takes the reader outside the bedroom and helps her to learn more about the characters involved. I enjoyed this story of the anonymous lover and his very willing partner, who would meet him at his place and keep blindfolded so as not to see who her "special gift was." His identity was kept secret, until their last encounter. Good way to hook the reader!

The love scenes were realistic and steamy.

Observations

There were a few spots that could use an edit. I've highlighted those, below.

"For a moment, he stopped still" [He stopped for a moment.] No need to say "stopped still" the reader gets what you mean, and this sentence is a more active voice.

"He then removed his tongue and started exploring her outer lips, making her inhale sharply." I think I will have nightmares over the thought of him removing his tongue!DId he use a knife? See how this can be misinterpreted?

TRY: He explored her outer lips with his tongue ... (Again, more active and less frightening.)

"One of his palm [palms] pulled her waist closer to his body as the other held her head in a stiff position so that he could kiss her crazy."

"Kat . . . come. You . . . can cum." [cum] You used it in the second part of the sentence, so, you should keep the same spelling. This would be the better spelling for this scene.

"Hey," Kat's soothed, "I accept you no matter what, even if you choose to keep me blindfolded forever." [Awkwardly stated tag line]

TRY: "I accept you no matter what, even if you choose to keep me blindfolded forever." Kat said in a soothing voice.

This was well done, because there were multidimensional scenes and character developments that added to Kat's life outside the bedroom. Thus, a more interesting storyline. The mystery was infused into the bedroom scenes and the drama was keenly shown in the barroom scenes. He life was tough but so was the mysterious stranger's life. There was a good moral to the story, also as Kat had to face her own shallowness as a person, which she tried to fix in the end.

Speaking of the end, oh, my goodness, I got goosebumps! It was a very clever twist to the overall effect of the story. .

A little more polish and this gem will shine brightly, not just in the erotica department, but also in the mystery and supernatural genres.

Until next time--write on!

Kudos!

Regards,
WebWitch









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