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| A pleasant hour djfun   Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! A Greetings from the "Invalid Item" I’m Samberine Everose THE TITLE- your friend here.Thank you for your interest in joining the contest "A Great Value of Expressions" And it’s my pleasure to give you the review gift. Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works. Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.  MY THOUGHTS ON THE : This is the only item that I’ve found when I visited your Portfolio, as every title of an item should have an alluring effect to attract a reader as I try to see it clearly on the title of your piece, the first thing that it hooked me is the word Bogus, I thought it’s a name, but it’s an adjective word that for me its not familiar, this really attract me most, and creates a curiosity to find about it. THE BODY- PLOT – The plot was about things we’ve been through in our studies, the happenings, the ups and downs of every students, their pressure in schools and also their peers of being a student, plus those things that makes them inspired. I can relate it because I also been a student, and until now I am still a student likes to learn new things to acquire knowledge. LENGTH – The given length is just too long for me, I’ve seen that you really explained it in detailed all the things in which the main character went through. Sometimes a short length story can be boring if the created item has no impact, and a long length story is enticing to read and the prospective reader will crave for more if there is an intense and gives an impact specially if the incidence in the story were created for a purpose. CHARACTER – There is only one character here, and it is on the first point of view and in narrating form. I liked how the words was delivered because it shows and took me in the main characters shoes, I feel the emotions what he felt, and thought what he think also. FORMAT/FLOW- The flow and format is good also, but sometimes I am lost on the middle, there are many branches that appears, I just think that it was intended maybe to make the story in detailed, but for me if overly done it can make a blur impression. IMAGERY – The crafted words creates somehow is vivid in imagery, there are words that are new to me, but it just balance with the words that are light and easy to catch. DIALOGUE – I didn’t seen any dialogue, sometimes dialogue can entice a story, or even the form, paragraphing of words and lines, this can evokes emotions, and creates an impact, because dialogue is how the characters are moving like a scene in a television. It can also break any monotonous of the story. GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION- I didn’t find any word that can distract the flow  I found this as a narrating form, or just showing an impression of life of a student, maybe you can add some conflict, like the problems of every student, and how to deal with it.  MY FINAL THOUGHTThis is nice, words are truly well done, but I am searching more about the character and incident of the story. Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4. Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future. Until next time.  
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You responded to this review 10/19/2014 @ 7:01am EDT