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 Uranium Eyes Open in new Window. [E]
If life is halved between sleeping and waking - then which is the greater reality?
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Opal!
This is good. Kind of 'quirky' with some of those descriptions, but good. Some people just starting banging away on their keyboard, but you obviously put some forethought into this, and it shows. Although I haven't been to school in years (decades even), I can still remember having to get up and face myself in the mirror in the mornings. And it wasn't a splendid sight. But the way you've used all these metaphors and similes ('like so many trapped algae fueled fireflies') was exceptional!
And that one word ending was perfect!
A comment and suggestion:
‘They lie between two lines of black lashes, in almond-shaped homes’ (excellent metaphor!)
‘I might show off the strapy summer heels they went so well with this time of year’ (strappy?)
Kee ponw ritin gon, Opal, and once again, welcome to WdC!
PS-You are talented, my friend. Don't waste it!

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