Hi Summertime and turtlemoon-dohi ! I hope you're having a nice September afternoon. I'm Grateful Jess and I'll be reviewing Summertime's 2 Haiku and Other Splashes of Color. Please remember these are only my opinions to help improve upon Summertime's writing talents; feel free to take whichever suggestions you find the most helpful!

First Impressions:
Wow, Summertime, these haiku and your last poem are AWESOME. You have a lot of talent and an eye for detail. I really love "At the Creek" because it almost reminds me of a poem in the style for two voices. If you want, check out the book Joyful Noise: Poems for Two Voices by Paul Fleischman because it's a great way to learn more about nature poems. I can send a link to your grandmother.

Overall Thoughts:

Haiku:
Follows the traditional format well- 5,7,5 rule and it's about nature.
Beautiful imagery and wonderful detail.
Alliteration and clever arrangement of words.

"At the Creek":
Rhythm and flow is perfect - it reads like a song where it just flows off your tongue.
Imagery - it feels like I'm at a creek on a beautiful day. I can hear the water rushing and the sun shining down on me.
Clever arrangement of words.

I think if you check out poems for two voices, I think "At the Creek" could easily become one and it would be such a fun format to read with your friends. You and your friends could make it like a song or a dramatic reading.

Final Thoughts:
Keep up the great work, Summertime! You really have a gift and I can't wait to read more of your work. I hope you have a great day! ~Jessica

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .