My Thoughts:
Ooh, I did like it! It's action!!!!

So what I thought would happen did. The main character and Roger got married, and they adopted the twins. Yay! Some more happy stuff!

Then comes all the sad stories. It was a really good way to cover a time differences though. It was stories of why they were fighting leading up to them actually fighting, or well, going on a mission.

Because you had described the food shipment a little bit before this chapter you didn't have to describe them so much in this one which led to you being able to include more action and keep this fast paced. Smart.

Once again, I loved all the cool tech they used, and the car chase was awesome. You ended it with a somber note though, a group is missing...

Characters:
I think the main character deserves another look.

She's definitely become a more confident and more outgoing person. I believe her voice has given her that confidence and defiance. She's becoming a very admirable character.

Suggestions:
NONE! What a surprise right?

Write on!

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