Hello Boo,

I found your story Review of "In the Still of the Night" to be a very enjoyable read.

I do not pretend to be an English major or an expert in grammar. I am simply offering my humble opinion concerning your work. I hope you find this feedback useful

Overall Impression: I thought your story was easy to read and follow along. The fantasy you created with this half fairy made me want for more when she was discovered. Was it her dad, was it her boy friend, you ended the story with me wanting to know more, and that is good.
I thought you used some good descriptive language which really helped me to be drawn into the story and allowed me to envision what was going on. I only hope there is a sequel to this piece..

Grammar and Mechanics: I saw no problems with your writing mechanics or grammar other than "I still hard his raspy snoring" (I believe that should be heard?)

Suggestions: The only suggestion I have is to keep putting pen to paper (or fingers to keyboard) You are very talented and I look forward to reading/reviewing more of your work.

I also see you are new to WDC and want to welcome you

Thank you for sharing your story.

I welcome you to visit my portfolio and offer a review on any piece that may interest you

Rozebud

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