Hello Over-Thinker,

I found your story "Invalid Item"  to be a well written piece.

I do not pretend to be an English major or an expert in grammar. I am simply offering my humble opinion concerning your work. I hope you find this feedback useful

Overall Impression: I come from the background of a non-denominational Christian Church. When I read your title in the review a newbie page, I wanted to see where you went with this. There was little in the area of doctrine that I agreed with, but the intent of this review is not to debate theology, it is to examine your writing ability. I thought you did a masterful job stating your topic in the beginning and then offering point after point to support it. You used quotes and references to support the research you made and you concluded the essay with your personal thoghts as to where you were in your spiritual journey. A well written piece (I hope your teacher gave you an A).

Grammar and Mechanics: I saw no problems with your writing mechanics or grammar

Suggestions: The only suggestion I have is to keep putting pen to paper (or fingers to keyboard) You are very talented and I look forward to reading/reviewing more of your work.

I also see you are new to WDC and want to welcome you

Thank you for sharing your story.

I welcome you to visit my portfolio and offer a review on any piece that may interest you

Rozebud

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