Hello Dave's trying to catch up

I chose to review your item today as part of my review challenge at the "Invalid Item" .

Title

Your title "Carpe Diem", Latin for "Seize the Day" could relate to many different themes. The poem is described as romance but this is not necessarily obvious from the title. The title encouraged me to read on out of curiosity. The phrase also reminds me of one of my favourite films, "The Dead Poet's Society". Have you seen it? If not, I definitely recommend it .

Form

You have made a point of stating that your poem is a "Grossblank" poem. I like the fact that you have included a note about this at the end as I would have had no idea what this meant. I read the content in the link and found it interesting, although I am a little confused as it states at the start that this form was "created in 2001". Can you just create a form of poetry like that?

I always find it impressive when people write poems to a specific form as it isn't something I tend to do, mostly writing free - form poetry or a very simple rhyming scheme that everyone is familiar with. However I have counted all your lines and syllables and they seem to match the description - very clever! I quite like the form actually, I think it reads well.

Content/Meaning

The overall meaning of the poem seems quite straight forward to me at first: A young couple spend a summer in romantic bliss centred around a beach setting and then, in conclusion, the summer is over and the relationship ends. I am a little confused in the last verse as it is not clear to me why the coming of winter means the ending of a relationship? Perhaps these two have met on a summer holiday or something - a bit like in "Grease"?! Perhaps they have just finished college and have to go out in to the World of work hence their "youthful" phase being over, but I am not really sure. Of course, it may have been written this way on purpose so that the reader can fill in the blanks and draw their own conclusions....

Imagery/writing style

For me, the best part of your poem is your imagery and your descriptions. Because of this, it does not seem to matter as much that the theme is not something which particularly interests me or which I can relate to as your poem is worded so beautifully. The words sound like water tumbling from a waterfall! The sunset morphing to "velvet black", the moon gliding "'cross the spangled sky" and the winter clouds cloaking "the light of day" all contribute to making this poem a pleasurable read and conjure up these striking images of nature in my mind.

In conclusion

I enjoyed reading this poem, you display your obvious talent for writing poetry here in an interesting form with some fantastic imagery and well described settings. The meaning at the end felt a little unclear to me but it was nevertheless a rewarding read.


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