Hi Missy,
I first want to wish you a *pink*"Happy Birthday." I first began reading your blog and when I got up to entry #6, I found this gem, "Cave of the Damned.” Naturally, I had to stop to read it. Why? You do write some amazing stories that shock your readers. Anyway, that's what I like to read and wasn't one bit disappointed. So, here is my review. Please remember, I'm a writer just like you and these are only my impressions. My ultimate goal is to be helpful and supportive. Thanks for sharing your work.

OVERALL SENSE: With the background history on both of these main character, my curiosity was at its peak on what Eddie found that could be so interesting. When Stan found out about the secret and how it appears and disappears; wouldn't that give a person pause before continuing onward? I know that I have plenty of curiosity, but on something such as this; no way would I have entered.

         TITLE APPEAL: "Cave of the Damned" had my curiosity peaking. The subtitle is "Two friends search for a mysterious cave, and find more than they bargained for" gives out a little more information on what you'll be reading.

         STYLE/VOICE: The style is supernatural and the voice stays strong throughout this story.

         TONE/MOOD: The tone of the story has it joyful and optimistic moments along with the sad and serious moments. The mood is suspenseful and mysterious.

         SCENE/SETTING: The scene and setting takes place at Stan's home where he is waiting for Eddie to take him to his secret discovery.

         CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT: I think you developed these character really well. I liked Stan because he stuck up for Eddie throughout their school days.
Personality: Both Stan's and Eddie's personalities show they are willing to fight for what is right. Stan for showing compassion and Eddie who wanted to better himself in life.
Motivation: Stan and Eddie stayed friends and now into adult life. Eddie seems to be more an instigator on discovering interesting things for them to investigate.

         PLOT: The plot is simple, Eddie and Stan are out to investigate a cave. What is so strange about it makes them want to investigate all the more.
Structure: I find the story to be fast moving with a great plot that keeps your interest. It's well put together and the scenes fall into place as the character are checking out this mysterious cave.
Development: This story is well-developed with its twist and turns on what is going to happen. All the while I kept thinking how will this story end?

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/SENTENCE STRUCTURE: I found no errors.

AREAS FOR IMPROVEMENT: NONE

         LIKES: I liked the mystery behind this plot which brought out my curiosity.

         DISLIKES: I found nothing to dislike.

FAVORITE LINE(S): I did have some favorite lines that I would like to highlight. I'll explain why I like them and how they added to the story.

          QUOTE HERE: He stood by the door swaying from one side to the other while I put on my boots and jacket. He never spoke a word. It was odd to see him so quiet.

          My Comment: I found this a little suspect and was already expecting something bad to happen. I, myself, would be thinking, does he know something that I don’t know and why is he acting like this?

          QUOTE HERE: After a few more minutes, we came upon a cave hidden in a patch of fir trees. I don't know how he ever found it, especially in the dark. There was a full moon that night, but the shadows seemed to eat away at most of its light. In all my years of wandering through those woods, I never ran across it myself.

          My Comment: Now again these sentences show that this cave is not of the ordinary. Why behind all this appearing and disappearing? What is this phenomenon all about? This is already a good sign to stay away; so, do not go it.

JUST MY PERSONAL OPINION: I loved your blogs up to #6. You have an interesting mind and I love how you named your other voices. I think they are more like your muses. Whatever they are or do, keep up with that great humor of yours. I will read on. Thanks for sharing this item! I only review things that I enjoy reading and I truly did enjoy this piece.



Take care now, keep on writing, I’ll keep on reading,
Jeannie🌺



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .