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 | I Want You So Bad  [13+] How I image a teenage boy feels, am I right?  |
| (3.5)  Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! Title: I Want You So Bad Author: Kortney Rae Type: Poem I assume gorilla glue is really sticky glue. I guess that is a definite image.  The poem is short, to the point, and it makes it clear how one feels when in the throes of new love and passion. It captures all the arousal, all the emotions of want. One does indeed shiver at the sight of beauty. I suspect it's the same way for both men and women. Desire doesn't know just one sex, it knows both. I don't think I'd put the word "red" in, "red" font unless you had a reason like a contest. Doing it, just because you can, isn't enough of s reason for me.  It just looks more mature not to. There is a definite erotic tone to this poem, but it is muted at times and always respectful. An occasional splash of punctuation might be useful here. It'll help the reader with stops and starts like in line three. I also just think it makes poetry look cleaner. I think you've probably caught how guys think, from my experience it's true anyway. Hey, it's good to be wanted, no matter what sex you are. As long as that passion comes with respect, that is all that matters. I see that you are new to Writing.com. I want to welcome you to the site and I hope your stay is a log and rewarding one. 
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