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 Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! Title: Love VS Lust Author: mizzkris20 Type: Poem I'm sure some people have always confused love and lust. But I have no idea whether more people believe that now than twenty, fifty, or one hundred years ago. Actually, I am not sure how I could ever know such a thing. Is lust really a sin? Oh, I know it is one of the seven deadly sins and most religions would undoubtedly frown upon it, but I'm not sure what is wrong with a strong sexual desire for someone, especially if the emotion is a mutual desire. I am not saying it should be on the same level with love, just wondering if it is actually a sin. You do make clear your distinctions between the two: Love is pure, while lust is sordid. In addition, I would never try to suggest that lust is in any way superior to love, it’s a different animal entirely. I wonder if you think one can have lust for someone they love? Maybe I am confusing lust with passion, I don't know, but it seems a strong desire and need for someone, even if you love that person, is still lust. All of this that I have written means little. I am just thinking aloud. The main thing is, you are extolling the virtues of love, showing its finer qualities and the benefits that it has over lust. I do wonder about the seeming contrasts between lines one and four. Line one calls love a "lovely sin." Yet line four calls it, "deadly." It just seems like a contradiction. One thing that bothers me is that eight of the twelve lines begin with the letter, "L." It just gets a little repetitive. In line four, I think you want, "it's." In line ten, you need spaces after your second commas. I wonder if you should change the emphasis of this poem. Maybe it should focus the end on love and not lust. Yet how it ends, with you focusing on lust, it feels like the poem’s real interest is a religious one. Yet even if it were, focusing on love as the main ending would put the punctuation on love. It just seemed odd to end it with two lines about lust. It is an interesting poem that focuses on two subjects that are too often confused for one another. 
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You responded to this review 11/25/2012 @ 5:56pm EST