| None of this review is personal. It is just my opinion, nothing more. If you find anything I suggested helpful, then I am pleased. I guess this is a synopsis, though it doesn't say it is, so I can only review it as a finish product. Still, I'll assume to play to add dialogue, description, plot and all that stuff that makes a story. As it now rests, it lack all that makes a story, a story. Even this synopsis is lacking in the basics of grammar. The story lacks punctuation and a quick editing would produce: Shawn experiences his life with the idea of running away from home to explore. Shawn is not a little kid, he is 23 and ready for his adventure. He runs into a very confusing situation and he believes that if he tries, he will be able to come to an end with fame or just a new life. I'm not sure what that last part means: "he will be able to come to an end with fame or just a new life." Does he plan to kill himself? And is that is only alternatives? You might want to make that part a little clearer. Hopefully you'll actually write the story and will keep in mind grammar as you do so. I see you are new to the site and want to welcome you to Writing.com and hope you have many rewarding years of writing. ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
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